22 Responses to “Toothpaste”

  1. Matty says:

    what a great story?

    I liked the scene betweeen the neigbour and Rodney.

    You really should be proud, excellent story, cannot wait until your next story.

  2. Mick says:

    That was EXCELLENT!
    Personally I think that was even better than Licensed to Drill, White Mice or Christmas Trees.
    You should think about working it into a 30 minuter!

    What a laugh!

  3. Matt Thomas says:

    I enjoyed this and laughed at the gags because you can picture whats happening/imagine facial expressions/how they are saying the lines.

    Must of been fun to write!

  4. Wayne Barrett says:

    Nice try. I’m thinking about doing one myself, but it is a long script, not just scenes. Good effort!

    • ComedyRemixed says:

      You should post it, because everyone on this website is really friendly and everyone will really appreciate it.

      Thanks for reading mine :)

  5. Rico says:

    Time to come out of fan fiction retirement.

  6. Bill says:

    I personally thought this script was in the same league as the John Sullivan ones. Excellent from start to finish. I wish this had been an episode. Loved every bit of it – thanks for sharing.

  7. Glenn says:

    I loved it mate, thought I was reading a script for part of a new episode, Cheer’s

  8. Simon N says:

    Very good script! There wasn’t a bit in it where I thought it didn’t sound right. You’ve got them spot on mate!
    Thankyou.

  9. Brandon says:

    Pretty good. Although I was left with the feeling of wanting more. However, great short script, made me laugh, enjoyed it! Good job.

    • ComedyRemixed says:

      It’s always difficult to keep the balance between too short and too long, i could of written an extra scene or two, and had some other characters pop up, (like Tony Driscoll or maybe Trigger) But i wouldn’t want it to drag on.

      Thanks for reading :)

  10. Griff says:

    Funny short episode.

    Liked the line from Rodney when telling Albert to act himself after questioning Del’s advice of acting odd.

    Make this script in to a full episode please!

    • ComedyRemixed says:

      Thanks, I didn’t want to make it very long, this is more like a short comic relief scene, and it’s my first attempt, so thats also why i kept it short :)

  11. admin says:

    Great script – very good standard / story
    I really enjoyed it

    made me laugh when Rodney got caught sniffing it

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